Had you told me this was a story from Celtic folklore I'd believe you. Great job!
Short story about 2 decomposing bodies. Kind of sexualizing decomposition.
Completely factually inaccurate but I think the concept is solid and so long as the execution is good enough, it might just be OK.
I like the visual writing style. A good starting idea to begin with great symbolic potential.
You're a legend down round these parts!
There was a period where I was busy and wasn't posting to this community and your posts are the reason the community survived and even gave me hope that there's actually interest in the community.
As for how much help you can find on Lemmy, I'll be honest, not much. There will be a few positive voices there but you probably won't get more than 5 people giving feedback. This is a small instance on a small social media platform.
However I'll always be here to help on this community.
And @bonesofthemoon@lemmy.world is someone cool who's in these communities too!
Do go ahead and ask for any help you need. You'll have atleast me giving you feedback.
I'm big on preplanning. I start with ideas, not stories. So even if I have an idea I decide what the themes and philosophy of the idea is instead of structuring a story first.
Basic idea:
So i want to write a story on the horror of consciousness. So i wanna explore how fragile and fragmented consciousness really is, especially when placed in an alien context. That the mind is intricately tied to the body, and breaking that connection results in existential madness.
Story that could explore this:
In a scientific experiment, the consciousness of a predator and a prey animal are swapped to study how their behaviors and survival instincts change. What begins as a seemingly straightforward study spirals into a nightmarish descent into madness as each consciousness struggles to adapt to a body designed for the opposite role in the food chain.
This swap allows me to write about existential horror, where both creatures grapple with primal fear and alien 'sensory overload'. They can't even grasp the lir emotions.
(I'm actually not sure if I wanna go down this route for the story but its an option).
Stylistic choices:
For a story like this I know i can use some typical writing tools, like split povs, stream of consciousness writing and elements of body horror and eldritch madness as the aesthetic guides to dictate feeling and genre. (Although I'm not happy with the story and will probably go down some other route for the very same idea since I do wanna explore that).
Now i know a lot about the story from a simple exercise of knowing what I wanted in the first place. When you know the purpose your story serves your narrative can be more cohesive.
Similarly you can create a one paragraph summary of your story. Then write a one page descriptive summary. Then break that page into chapters or thirds. As you break it down and add details you create something very clear and concise. This is a more formulaic technique I've sometimes used for novella length writing. I find it fun.
no no. I understand the frustration. This is his second consecutive bad year but he's clearly not lost it. You can see when a player is over, the way they move, their physicality, the decision making. Like the final 2-3 years of Marcelo, that's a player who's done.
Mbappe is doing terrible especially for the money he's being paid. And I'll be the first to say I didn't want him here AT ALL. HATED his signing. But this is not how squad building goes. You don't invest over a 100m on a player to discard him 15 games into the season.
He'll find his form sooner or later. Hopefully its sooner. Maybe he doesn't hit his career peak but that doesn't mean he can't be a great player and a definite nonetheless.
I just hope the club doesn't do anything reactionary. Luckily we haven't been reactionary for a while now.
This has community top post potential and as the current holder of the title. It strikes fear in me
That would be a funny dystopia
What about all the ai propaganda?
No clue what he's rolling his eyes for lmao.
Would love to see you there!
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There has never been a twitter link shared in this community and its not a major threat per se.
I just decided to go through all the communities I created and block twitter now if people agreed. I've posted this message on like 6 of them. (Although ideally I would like to ban all centralised social media links at least)
It's just formalising what many of us believe (on Lemmy atleast, that's why we're here).
As for the lack of activity on this community, that's my bad, I'll be getting back to posting soon.